Sea Creatures

22 Dec

For Friday Fictioneers, helmed by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, from a photograph by the talented stained glass artist, Jean Hays.

I’ve returned from the Land of the Long White Cloud to tiny, yet still beautiful, vog shrouded Big Island, and offer those readers kind enough to check in after my prolonged absence, a true story instead of my usual flash fiction. Genre would be autobiography, I suppose. Matters not. The moment remains etched in my heart forever.

Please don’t feel pressed to comment. This departure from the norm is a gift for you as I try to slip back quietly into the groove. Mahalo, D.

Sea Creatures

She appeared like a waking dream in the bow swell as we made our way toward the dive site. Her every move seemed effortless, whether swerving minutely in response to pressure changes or rising in a seamless moment to breathe and then return to that perfect place at the heart of the wave.

Spread-eagled over the gunwale I held my hand an inch above the water, palm down. Each time she breached, her smooth, glistening back surged slick and wet beneath my fingers and I tasted life in the warm spray of her exhalation.

Fellow travelers, I remember her still.

.

22 Responses to “Sea Creatures”

  1. Lindaura Glamoura December 22, 2013 at 8:04 am #

    Ahh, very beautiful memory. I long to see a dolphin in the wild, but to be so close must be glorious. When I visit my family in Marina Del Rey, I walk the jetty every day and hope to see a dolphin, but never have. I am happy that I get to see playful sealions, but a dolphin….the telling of your experience was sublime…

    • dmmacilroy December 22, 2013 at 8:36 am #

      Dear Lindaura,

      They are a sight to behold. Unbridled joy in perpetual motion. I’m sure you’ll get you wish one day.

      Thanks for reading and sharing.

      Aloha,

      Doug

  2. Sandra December 22, 2013 at 9:16 am #

    A beautiful moment, captured beautifully, as is your way. Welcome home, have a lovely Christmas, Doug.

    • dmmacilroy December 22, 2013 at 9:34 am #

      Dear Sandra,

      Thanks for the welcome home and the kind comments. I appreciate them very much. Keep looking for strangers at each lock you negotiate. I’m going to surprise you there one day.

      Aloha,

      Doug

  3. rochellewisoff December 22, 2013 at 9:27 am #

    Dear Doug,

    With each swell and wave of your words I feel life and taste spray. I exhale as I brush away a tear. Beautiful writing, fellow traveler.

    Shalom and kia ora,

    Rochelle

    • dmmacilroy December 22, 2013 at 9:31 am #

      Dear Rochelle,

      I missed you while I was away. It is nice to be back in your neck of the sea. Thank you for adding to my ocean with your sweet comment.

      Aloha,

      Doug

      • rochellewisoff March 30, 2014 at 1:32 pm #

        Dear Doug,

        This quality of work is sorely missed…by me. I’ll just have to swim back here from time to time and dive into the waves of your beautiful, well chosen, polished and edited words.

        Shalom,

        SD

  4. David Stewart December 22, 2013 at 10:35 am #

    Doug,
    what a great, poetic beginning to this. The idea of a waking dream makes this seem like a fairy tale. Very done.
    -David

    • dmmacilroy December 22, 2013 at 11:26 am #

      Dear David,

      Stick a fork in me, eh?

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      Aloha,

      Doug

  5. bridgesareforburning December 22, 2013 at 4:11 pm #

    Hi Doug,
    How could I not comment on such a beautiful piece of writing? From this and previous readings, I’ve come to realize that you are an animal lover. One of the ways I judge the character of my fellow humans is their kinship with their fellow creatures. You pass judgment easily. Thanks for sharing this moment so that I could, at least vicariously, be there and revel in in. Mahalo. Ron

  6. elmowrites December 22, 2013 at 4:24 pm #

    Everytime I’ve seen dolphins, it’s been a beautiful experience; you’ve taken it a step further and allowed me to touch one. Even vicariously, that’s a moment to treasure.
    Welcome home to the tiny Big Island of the Fictioneers. I’ve missed your words and your wisdom.
    Jen

  7. rgayer55 December 22, 2013 at 4:42 pm #

    Dear Doug,
    How well you paint with words. I’ve only seen dolphins from afar. To touch one must be glorious, now I feel I have. Thanks for the gift.

  8. tedstrutz December 22, 2013 at 7:02 pm #

    A lucky man I know has been to the top of the world and the bottom of the ocean… and he touched a dolphin. He has shared those joys with me… Yes, Mahalo, D.

  9. The Bumble Files December 22, 2013 at 7:38 pm #

    Dear Doug,
    I saw a family of dolphins and it was so magical! They are wondrous creatures. Your wonderful writing is so fitting for them! Welcome back. Have a Merry Christmas!
    Amy

  10. valeriedavies December 22, 2013 at 9:42 pm #

    Dear Doug – exquisite – the moment and the writing..I held my breath as I read…what a gift to you and what a gift to us…

  11. waitingforaname December 23, 2013 at 12:22 am #

    An elegant, poetic piece. Very soothing to read.

  12. pattisj December 23, 2013 at 12:44 am #

    What a great experience.

  13. kz December 23, 2013 at 11:18 pm #

    such a glorious experience. i’d really love to touch a dolphin too! šŸ™‚ i enjoyed your beautiful descriptive story. happy holidays!

  14. Karen Whitelaw December 24, 2013 at 7:49 am #

    What a incredible experience, Doug. You made me feel I was right there with you. How clever to jolt us with the mention of ‘gunwale’ to add another layer to the story. Beautifully done.

  15. plaridel December 25, 2013 at 10:20 pm #

    simply amazing… i don’t know if somebody can describe it much better than you did.

  16. Taygibay December 27, 2013 at 1:35 am #

    I loved the unusual marked gender pronoun? Dolphin … or mermaid was it? Nice spin : yo ho ho and a bottle of rum mate! Tay.

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