Sweet Wine and the Fullness of Time

19 Jul

Soft in the background of this 103 word story for Madison Woods’ FridayFictioneers, Joni Mitchell sings A Case of You and I think of the beauty of Haiku and how I would much rather have shared this story with less words.

Not accomplished enough to go there, but soon…

Other stories are here and something tells me they’ll be good ones. Summer’s heat and the wine will have gone to people’s heads. Stay safe, everyone, and if you can’t be good, be careful. Aloha, D.

I was hesitant at first, fearful of sending tendrils into arid soil, but velvet warmth and a wellspring of moisture urged me on. Rising from rootstock and fecund earth, held erect by the staves and twine of desire, my trunk thickened, each new leaf turning ever toward her radiance.

Two years on I am solid and strong from her caress, the fruit of my love filled to bursting with elixir dโ€™amour.

My shining love has not yet grasped the measure of my feelings, but Bacchus, the god that comes, assures me that one day she will taste her effect upon the vine.

38 Responses to “Sweet Wine and the Fullness of Time”

  1. oldentimes July 19, 2012 at 11:59 pm #

    I’ll drink to that!

  2. mysocalledDutchlife July 19, 2012 at 11:59 pm #

    “The fullness of time…”. Flaming heck, Doug. It IS hot in here. Such displays of mastery! Cold shower. The vines are strong in this one.

    http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/through-the-grapevine-ff-200712/

  3. sustainabilitea July 20, 2012 at 12:17 am #

    Doug, this is most unique story of all I’ve read so far. Great job.

  4. raina July 20, 2012 at 12:47 am #

    HI Doug, this is one of yours I have enjoyed the most (and your stories are always enjoyable). Amazing and well written, loved it! Thanks!

  5. boomiebol July 20, 2012 at 2:37 am #

    Very beautiful!! And so pleasant to read…mine is here
    http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/07/18/office-talk-friday-fictioneers-718/

  6. John Wiswell July 20, 2012 at 3:49 am #

    The prettiest piece of work I may have ever found Bacchus in. A dignified plant, Doug!

  7. Carrie July 20, 2012 at 4:11 am #

    Very nicely done. I especially enjoyed how you get fecund earth in there. Love that word ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. Jan Brown July 20, 2012 at 4:51 am #

    Sumptuous, Doug! Provokes the senses, as you always do.

  9. Linda July 20, 2012 at 7:59 am #

    Such strong and evocative language and such a command of vocabulary too – I’m always impressed when I come on over to have a read. I particularly liked the ‘elixir d’amour’ and the reference to Bacchus will always appeal too ๐Ÿ™‚
    http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/07/20/friday-fictioneers-the-grapevine/

  10. Joanna (Lazuli Portals) July 20, 2012 at 8:16 am #

    Once again you illustrate your skill and mastery, Doug – such a ripe story, combining both promise and satisfaction.

    My rather more ordinary attempt is here:
    http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/sweet-and-sour

  11. Sandra July 20, 2012 at 8:20 am #

    A steamy piece, full of innuendo. Or is that just my mind? I always enjoy reading your submissions, and this is no exception.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/triple-exposure-friday-fictioneers-july-2012/

  12. Kaitlin July 20, 2012 at 9:03 am #

    Beautifully done, a wonderful love song to grape growers… or lovers, whichever ๐Ÿ™‚

  13. rochellewisoff July 20, 2012 at 9:24 am #

    How can I add to what’s been said? This piece is gorgeous; almost more poetry than prose. “What a piece of work is man…how noble in reason…” Suffice it say, I enjoyed this one. As always I look forward to your flashes every week and have yet to be disappointed.
    Sharom.

  14. elmowrites July 20, 2012 at 9:32 am #

    Crikey, Doug, you’ve gone steamy again! With all the poetic genius you work into these pieces, to give the reader an impression that he (or she) might be guilty of reading far too much into each individually-innocent word!
    When I read your intro, I was determined to present you with three words you could cut, but I’m easily distracted, so let’s see… OK, if you’re keen to hit the magic number, I’d suggest you lose “to bursting” (good, but slightly cliched and unnecessary) and change “assures me that” to “assures me”. There, never one to fail a challenge, me!

  15. unspywriter July 20, 2012 at 11:31 am #

    Poetic and sensual and amazingly written. Wonderful piece, Doug.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/asylum/

  16. EmmaMc July 20, 2012 at 12:24 pm #

    Hi Doug

    How can you not write something so majestic with the warm summer heat and Joni Mitchell in the background? Poetic and beautifully written ๐Ÿ™‚

  17. Parul July 20, 2012 at 12:51 pm #

    Beautiful!

  18. rgayer55 July 20, 2012 at 1:45 pm #

    Kudos, my friend. I can see people climbing to the top of that Hawaiian mountain to learn writing from the Master. While it is a beautifully crafted piece, I’m dissapointed that it never got to the part about your drunken Grandmother (I assume she was released from prison?), her dog, and the oncoming train. Quit teasing me like that, MacIlroy, or write you into one of my stories – HA!

    Stop by and torture yourself with mine
    http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

  19. Craig Towsley July 20, 2012 at 1:57 pm #

    sending tendrils, is lyrical, and you’ve managed to weave your metaphor so thoroughly, the eroticism is veiled and shadowed but at the forefront at the same time. magic, as always.

  20. theforgottenwife July 20, 2012 at 2:22 pm #

    Raise a glass of wine to another wonderfully written piece. Very lyrical. I love the reference to Bacchus. Nice little bit of mythology to round it out. Salut!
    http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/07/19/friday-fictioneers-july-20-2012/

  21. Madison Woods July 20, 2012 at 3:56 pm #

    What a sensuous and erotic and yet innocent story. This is the first time I’ve seen Bacchus in the feminine light… the vine sounded quite masculine, actually it sounds like a coming of age tale…

  22. Susan Wenzel (@SusanWenzel) July 20, 2012 at 4:08 pm #

    Goodness me, Doug. I’m all atwitter! Your tantalizing words make me want for a glass of said inebriant – even at this early hour. We drove through miles of wine country on our recent trip through California, but I only saw rows and rows of grapes – not fruits “filled to bursting with elixir dโ€™amour.”

    ~Susan (www.susanwenzel.com)

    • Susan Wenzel (@SusanWenzel) July 20, 2012 at 4:10 pm #

      On a second (and a far deeper) thought…”she” may be the sun, but you may not even be speaking of wine at all…oy.

  23. erinleary July 20, 2012 at 6:50 pm #

    Like Susan, I was thinking “she” was the sun, but the ending made me question that idea. So…very provocative on several levels and an enjoyable enigma.

    Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/07/19/flash-friday-fiction-12

  24. ron pruitt July 20, 2012 at 7:44 pm #

    Hi Doug,
    What you’ve done here is a beautiful and plaintive evocation. I think it was the extra three words that made it extra special. The voicing is strong and compelling. Superb piece of writing!

    • Lora Mitchell July 21, 2012 at 4:24 am #

      What can I add that hasn’t already been said..except it was brilliant. Plus, the comments betw, you and Russell are another thing. lol. I’m #68 on the list.

  25. silentlyheardonce July 21, 2012 at 1:39 pm #

    Very colorfully written. I enjoyed the read.

  26. newpillowbook July 21, 2012 at 1:46 pm #

    Wonderful story – I had to read it a couple of times to decide who “she” is – I think she’s the sun?? Meanwhile it also seems very metaphorical, with the narrator really a human lover, but the metaphors wouldn’t work without the physical details of what it’s like (!) to be a struggling grapevine.

    Then again, maybe I’m reading much too much into it!

  27. Kris Kennedy July 21, 2012 at 1:58 pm #

    Sensuality at it’s max. I could read your piece over and over. Sip in each word, and smile. So beautiful!

  28. Nifti July 21, 2012 at 2:04 pm #

    Yello Doug!

    I felt this… Very deep. Great piece.

  29. Karen July 21, 2012 at 7:08 pm #

    Very nice, I really enjoyed this ๐Ÿ˜€

  30. flyoverhere July 21, 2012 at 8:23 pm #

    Cheers! I love every word of this beautiful piece. There are meanings that come through that make interpretation dependent on the reader’s frame of mind at the moment.

  31. Jeannie July 23, 2012 at 2:59 am #

    I love this Doug. How original and so sensual (I agree with Kris!). I want to be the wine from the vine ๐Ÿ™‚ Outstanding work my friend!

  32. rich July 23, 2012 at 4:58 am #

    this might need an “R” rating. in a good way.

  33. JKBradley July 23, 2012 at 1:32 pm #

    Who wouldn’t wish to be the vine under such coaxing attentiveness and stroking?

  34. tedstrutz July 25, 2012 at 2:06 pm #

    A beautiful accompaniment to the photo, Doug.

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