Dragonfly

10 Feb

You know the drill. Words: 100. Fun: Maximum. Photo Prompt: Shown below.

Stories inspired by the prompt: Here ( http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/flash-fiction/so-near-100-words/  )

Quality: High

(No pun intended:)

Dragonfly

Alice sipped her tea in the warm sunshine that peeked in under the roof of her lanai.

Whorls spiraled languorously in the wake of her spoon as she stirred the noisome brown liquid steeping in her cup. Delicate rainbow streamers trailed from each eddy and limned the borders of laminar flow and liquid locked in surface tension. A dragonfly flew in from the Koi pond to shimmer motionless on electric wings above the vapor trail that rose from her brew. Time slowed, interval stretched, and awareness flooded her mind.

God, she thought, good mushroom tea makes for a beautiful morning.

25 Responses to “Dragonfly”

  1. Laura Dunlap (@auralind) February 10, 2012 at 5:58 pm #

    Aha! Would that be magic mushroom tea by any chance?
    Dreamy language, languid language, as we sip our tea on your lanai.
    Thanks, Doug,
    Lindaura

  2. Craig Towsley February 10, 2012 at 6:01 pm #

    beautiful words like waves lapping,
    so hard to pick a favourite part
    but I think I’ll go with this:
    ” liquid locked in surface tension”

    Fantastic as always, Doug

  3. Carlos Repuesto de la Tabla February 10, 2012 at 6:08 pm #

    Alice in Wonderland! Very nice, perfect cosmic detail, macro in the micro, time slowing to a stop. Write what you know, they say…

  4. Susan Wenzel (@SusanWenzel) February 10, 2012 at 8:10 pm #

    I like that you used both “Alice” and “mushrooms” in this story although it did not go where I thought it would. Instead, it took me back to Bali some 12-ish years ago. My husband and older daughter and I stayed in an Hindu Ashram for two weeks. Every morning at sunrise, a young girl brought a tea tray to our cabin on the beach. The clink of the pottery was my wake-up call. While the other two slept, I crept outside and sat on the porch to sip my tea and watch the sunrise. It ended up being my favorite part of the whole trip. (As an aside, I was 10-12 weeks pregnant when we were there, and I felt like I was communing with my unborn child as well.)

  5. Siobhan Muir February 10, 2012 at 8:14 pm #

    Indeed it does! I love the descriptions and how they depict a sense of disorientation of reality without spoiling the effects. Well done, Doug. 🙂

  6. Russell February 10, 2012 at 9:37 pm #

    You painted a beautiful picture, Doug. One of those rare moments when time stands still and we wrap it around ourselves like a warm blanket. Wish I were there now.

  7. Jake Kale February 10, 2012 at 10:18 pm #

    That’s some beautiful imagery right there. I’ve come here via a more unsettling piece, and reading this has slowed my spinning thoughts and calmed me right down. Very impressive that you could do that with so few words. Excellent job.

    Mine is here:
    http://jaykayel.wordpress.com/2012/02/10/loose-lips-100-word-flash-fiction/

  8. bridgesareforburning February 10, 2012 at 11:53 pm #

    I went with you on this trip. It sounds real, descriptive details vivid and authentic. And the words flow nicely, as they always do in your writing.
    My little ditty: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

  9. elmowrites February 11, 2012 at 12:11 am #

    Hi Doug, somehow missed your post earlier! Once again, you’ve created a beautiful piece here – but this time it felt like a single moment stretched out to its full enjoyment. I think I need to get me some of this mushroom tea you’re brewing!

  10. susielindau February 11, 2012 at 1:23 am #

    Magic mushroom tea perhaps? Nice swirling undulation of words and vivid description Doug. Oh that tea tastes good………………………

  11. Parul February 11, 2012 at 2:09 am #

    Doug… A standing ovation and a bow.
    How do you do it every time?
    You are a pro!

  12. V. L. Gregory-Pohlenz February 11, 2012 at 5:25 am #

    What a wonderful, calm atmosphere you painted with your words. Lovely! I think I’d prefer any other tea than mushroom, however. 🙂 Loved this. Mine: wwwvlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com.

  13. Gary Bailey (@BlueFury47) February 11, 2012 at 10:50 am #

    There’s something almost poetic in this story. Great stuff.

  14. Mike February 11, 2012 at 12:22 pm #

    Some beautiful imagery here Doug.
    My favourite line was, “Time slowed, interval stretched, and awareness flooded her mind.”
    Oh for some of that mushroom tea.

  15. LupusAnthropos February 11, 2012 at 8:37 pm #

    Nice visual that puts us right there.

    Here’s my entry: http://wp.me/p24aJS-2F

  16. Lora Mitchell February 12, 2012 at 12:54 am #

    Aloha Doug: Love your colorful, vivid, original descriptions of a tranquil day. “Delicate rainbow steamers”:… lovely. You made me want to be there with her…and yes, drinking mushroom tea. PS: Is there such a tea? Lora 🙂

  17. Lora Mitchell February 12, 2012 at 12:57 am #

    Correction: I meant to write – “Delicate rainbow streamers.” … again, lovely. Also thank you for leaving your beautiful comment on my blog…triplemoonstar.blogspot.com.

    • dmmacilroy February 12, 2012 at 2:30 am #

      Dear Lora,

      As Carlos said in his comment; write about what you know. Mushroom tea is typically used to deliver the active hallucinogen in Psylocybin mushrooms to aficionados of the drug. The description I used in the piece will let those who have experienced mushroom tea know that Alice is starting to hit the beginning stages of her ‘trip’.

      Welcome aboard, Lora.

      Aloha,

      Doug

  18. Madison Woods February 12, 2012 at 3:05 am #

    Loved your story Doug and I got a kick that Alice started out a day like this rather than the other way around. Very subtle showing you did, and it had a very calming effect.

  19. Judee February 12, 2012 at 1:59 pm #

    Beautifully written and both subtle and obvious as the bloom of awareness begins to seep into the passage. Your writing really brought back some very old memories.

    My post:
    http://writetuit.wordpress.com/2012/02/12/flash-friday-soupe-du-jour/

  20. writingbothsidesVincent February 12, 2012 at 3:39 pm #

    You weave a beautiful tapestry with words.

  21. Dallas Kelly February 13, 2012 at 12:27 am #

    This was very poetic and each line held so much meaning. Very well done!

  22. Caely February 14, 2012 at 7:36 pm #

    Dear D,

    You had me at Alice. I did not see that ending though. You pulled it off well, as usual (in comparison to someone else who stared at the prompt for hours!).

    Love,
    Cae

  23. Robin Hawke February 21, 2012 at 7:28 pm #

    Love the combinations of images, reading about rainbow streamers then dragonflies–I eddied right along.

  24. The Lime February 23, 2012 at 10:33 pm #

    Doug! I don’t know how I missed this one, but it’s beautiful. The colors and the sense of time and space just shimmer right out of the piece. Wowee

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